POEM 3: 03 APRIL 2010

by Greg ~ April 3rd, 2010. Filed under: Poems.

Avid readers

We
are shameless
                        flirts

we follow the curves with visible lust,
we wait in ambush, setting up
eye contact

we trail
the tips of our tongues deliberately
sending out
                    moist code

we mirror, we touch our hair,
we are over-animated, easy
in our laughter

at the very sight
of the printed word

we
are shameless
                        flirts

Greg O’Connell © 2010

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33 Responses to POEM 3: 03 APRIL 2010

  1. Elizabeth
    April 3rd, 2010 at 10:07 am

    ” moist code” clever

    So true how we do this in flirtatious moments. I like the simple structure of this poem.

  2. Greg
    April 3rd, 2010 at 12:54 pm

    Thanks, Elizabeth. I flirted with the word “bibliophile” – but she was out of my league! =)

  3. lucychili
    April 3rd, 2010 at 4:54 pm

    honesty and intimacy
    the double edges of writing
    turning the word fidelity
    playing light across it’s facets

  4. Greg
    April 3rd, 2010 at 6:00 pm

    Thanks, Janet. Hope you’re enjoying NaPoWriMo as much as I am.

  5. Marisa Cappetta
    April 3rd, 2010 at 6:11 pm

    The line and stanza breaks are halting, like first date nerves. I like it a lot.

  6. Greg
    April 3rd, 2010 at 6:21 pm

    Thanks, Marisa. I really appreciate your insightful and gracious feedback. =)

  7. Esther
    April 4th, 2010 at 12:25 am

    Fantastic.. lol! You had me at hello (okay the first stanza). The title might work better if it was less prescriptive – I didn’t actually read the title first time around, which seemed to strengthen the closing lines. E

  8. Greg
    April 4th, 2010 at 12:41 am

    Thanks, Esther. Both for dropping by and your feedback. I didn’t intend the title “Avid readers” to be any kind of injunction. I simply wanted to take a popular cliche and give it a visceral twist. G =)

  9. Esther
    April 4th, 2010 at 1:14 am

    Yes… it works. E

  10. Daimler Gunrow
    April 4th, 2010 at 1:26 am

    Nice poem.

    ‘Setting up eye contact…’

    I look forward to reading the rest of your April poems, Greg.

    Feel free to check out mine at http://daimlergunrow.wordpress.com

    :P

  11. Greg
    April 4th, 2010 at 1:30 am

    Thanks, Daimler. I’ll be sure to drop by often. =)

  12. Derrick
    April 4th, 2010 at 1:36 am

    Hi Greg,

    Thanks for visiting my blog. I hope you will find your visits rewarding! Clearly you don’t need the RWP prompts.
    I see from your first three poems that you’re obviously a pro at this. I love the “moist code” bit too.

  13. Greg
    April 4th, 2010 at 1:37 am

    Thanks, Derrick. “Poetry pro”…suitably ambiguous…LOL. Hope you’re enjoying turning tricks as much as I am. =)

  14. Andy Sewina
    April 4th, 2010 at 2:23 am

    Yeah, that’s so true, love the bit about the ‘moist code’ .

  15. Greg
    April 4th, 2010 at 2:24 am

    Thanks, Andy. I guess it’s more subtle than semaphore…LOL.

  16. Linda Jacobs
    April 4th, 2010 at 5:14 am

    Ah, found your poems! I clicked on your link a couple times but couldn’t find them. Duh! All I had to do was look around. Too impatient, I guess, or not observant enough. Glad I found them!

    I love the way this reads like a girl flipping her hair and sashaying in front of a guy. I do feel this way when I open a good book!

  17. Greg
    April 4th, 2010 at 5:15 am

    Thanks, Linda. Likewise when I open a new book…except my hair doesn’t quite sashay…LOL. =)

  18. Chanda
    April 4th, 2010 at 7:08 am

    ¡caliente! very sexy.

  19. Greg
    April 4th, 2010 at 7:16 am

    LOL. Thanks, Chanda. Great to hear from another shameless word-lover. =)

  20. Joanne Johns
    April 4th, 2010 at 9:35 am

    Another fan of the moist code here (and the entire poem of course).

  21. Greg
    April 4th, 2010 at 9:40 am

    Thanks, Joanne. I’m flattered. The phrase was a risk…which apparently paid off. =)

  22. Sweet
    April 4th, 2010 at 9:57 am

    Though I usually despise being gathered into a specific group, what you have written is deep and true to the core. I read with smiles.

  23. Greg
    April 4th, 2010 at 10:19 am

    Thanks, Sweet. I think most poets happily acknowledge the seductive power of words. =)

  24. jone
    April 5th, 2010 at 2:20 am

    Thanks for stopping by my blog. I love the idea of flirting with the printed word. Books, reading is everything. I am also featuring 30 days of student work here: http://maclibrary.wordpress.com

  25. Greg
    April 5th, 2010 at 3:32 am

    Thanks, Jone. You’re an inspiration. =)

  26. pamela
    April 5th, 2010 at 11:30 am

    We are shameless. Nice take on the prompt.
    Pamela

  27. Greg
    April 5th, 2010 at 11:37 am

    Thanks, Pamela. The poem was written off-prompt, but it’s great that you spotted a link. Thanks for dropping by. And I’ll be sure to follow your blog this month. =)

  28. Therese Broderick
    April 5th, 2010 at 12:47 pm

    Great poem. I would love to see a series of poems extending this metaphor, because I would love to see that still immature, flirting avid reader get past all the flirting, mature, make a vow of eternal love, then commit through all the hardship until the end…

  29. Greg
    April 5th, 2010 at 12:48 pm

    Perhaps the key lies in committing to a mutually-exclusive…but inveterate…flirt. =)

  30. L.
    April 6th, 2010 at 7:22 am

    As others have said, I really like the line “moist code” and I really like this poem. It’s so true, too. Great job.

  31. Greg
    April 6th, 2010 at 7:23 am

    Thanks, L. for taking the time to comment. Much appreciated.

  32. Pam
    April 6th, 2010 at 11:00 am

    I see you enjoy exploring line repetition in this poem; I like to see what happens when lines and thoughts wrap themselves into a circle. Thanks for stopping by my blog :)

  33. Greg
    April 6th, 2010 at 11:05 am

    Thanks, Pam. A circle, a nest. =)

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