Returning over the Arthur’s
Stitched on a denim sky
the clouds are
and just for us, the sun
is singing forever
in blue jeans, babe.
Greg O’Connell © 2010
Brief but sweet. I see you went to two poetry gigs – did you go on to Al’s Bar as well?
Thanks, Catherine. Not quite as saccarine as it might seem: Zoe and I have a series of in-jokes about Neil Diamond songs. He’s on our ‘Cheesy Songs’ playlist, which gets played about once a week. And Will Ferrell does a great satiric version on YouTube. Yes…did six poems at Al’s Bar, among a really eclectic mix of performers. Loved it. =)
I’m glad he’s on the ‘Cheesy’ list…
Nothing cheesy about this piece.
Thanks, Stan. Maybe there’s a metaphor there: “her double camembert thighs”. Maybe not! =)
Nice… very nice
Thanks, Susan. Enjoyed the tanka discussion. =)
And what’s wrong with Neil Diamond, may I ask?!
Derrick – There’s no denying: the man could write a popular song. Besides, he ain’t heavy, and he’s my brother. =)
Neil Diamond? Cheesy? Haven’t you ever danced until the night became a brand new day?
See if I bring you flowers anymore!
Dan – I’m a believer. =)
Well written poem, though Neil Diamond does make me shudder.
Matt – I’m sure you’re not a solitary man. =)
nicely done for sure…..but…as FAR as Neil D can go….well FAR..thanks for this
Wayne – perhaps ride off into the distance with some travelling salvation show. =)
Ok, Neil Diamond is definitely cheesy (though has some catchy hits), but your poem definitely isn’t. See, even out of cheesy music comes beautiful poetry!
Thanks, Robin. Have yourself a glass of red, red wine. =)
I love the line “stitched on a denim sky”…wonderful!
Thanks, Richelle. Your comment is a beautiful noise. =)
it’s my first time reading your work, and i really enjoyed the “spirited-ness” of this!
Thanks, Carolee. Delighted I am, I said. =)
Okay Dad, enough with the cheesy come backs lol
Heehee! Thanks Rubez, my gorgeous daughter. You should’ve seen this one coming…’cos girl, you’ll be a woman soon. Mwah! Dad =)
Succinct, Greg. So well done ….
Thanks, Uma. No point in a longfellow serenade. =)
A little sweetie, delectable.
Thanks again, Marisa. Mimicking a cherry, cherry. =)
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